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there was once a boy who had all the write words to say
with all those fancy allegories, metaphors and similes
and antonyms of synonyms, like rails and snares and storms
and organs and trains and drums and hurricanes and
hearts,

and she was only a girl with plain words, the kinds of things
that are only found in piles of papers and pens, books
she keeps where she sleeps,

that will only break when he leaves in the morning,
but she shares everything, like a boat shares a bard,
like a cigarette shares a lung, like a mouth shares other mouths,
like an artist shares her heart.

but there is a running in her heart:
not that type of beat she got when she was a little girl
and her favorite boy gives her a kiss on the cheek, but like when
he first shared his words with hers,

the kind of thing she gets only with naked skin,
and not like that kind of naked skin, naked, but before that
when she looks up and his eyes shine in that kind of way she thinks
might've happened when shakespeare was a teenager, as if romeo
were professing to juliet right there, as if julius cursed brute just
before he died, as if all those unwritten sonnets in his head
were intertwining with hers,
a sea of poetry before they even touch skin,

but now he looks at her with the same eyes and he
speaks, "if you loved me with all of your everything
why would you not give me all of your everything with it?"
and before she knows it she's one of those girls she hates
on tv, and he is one of those boys she loves on tv, and rhymes like them
but not really, but only if she lets him: and her extra skin is dead
on the floor, and wow his line breaks at all the right places
           
but, only
if, she
lets
h
im

and slowly she forgets how to use commas and dashes
and periods feel like they've never existed, and all those books
she read dissipate before her eyes,
and suddenly she knows everything and everything she's been told
was all a lie

and not even writers keep alliteration in their pockets,
but there it was on the floor, with the white left on her jeans:
not naked name numb naked nothing null, not
love lading leaving lie lamb lust labor late laugh live living lone left,
or
breathe bones breathe bend breathe breast breathe brunt break breathe, but

gone.
either way, you're all still kids.
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Given 2012-11-28
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   Writer
You did a gr8 job, I loved it! :)
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AngerIssues1234 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is such a beautiful piece. It was a bit confusing when I first read it, but I reread it, and understood better. Very vivid and flows really well.

You deserve that DD! :heart:
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Lucy-Merriman Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Student General Artist
Love this! Sorry I can't leave an intelligent comment right now. Just, you know. Love. :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
To be honest, it didn't capture me the first time, that is, until I got to that final alliterated line and that's when I said, "I must read this again."

I must say now, it is for me, a subtle but beautiful build-up. Lovely work.
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ME-inator Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
:heart: :iconishipthemsohardplz:
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nixxohplease Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
mind blowing.
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:iconemberflight:
EmberFlight Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So beautiful. Simply.
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Fiflysoccertiger Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student General Artist
I love the "either way, you're all still kids." okay then lol.
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matttwithonet Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
right*
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SaintOfTheDragons Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Awesome piece, but one line reads,
"were professing to juliet right there, as if julius cursed brute just"
I'm not sure if you meant to say "Brutus".
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back-bones Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Student Writer
i did mean "brute" as in cursing the word. i was referring to the famous "et tu brute." thank you though.
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SaintOfTheDragons Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ah.
I didn't think it was a cursing word though.
No problem. :)
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AnimusCogito Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I almost cried. I would have if not for the fact that I'm in public. Oh my gosh.
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:iconlittlebear1998:
littlebear1998 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That was simply mind blowing spectacular. Well deserved DD :D
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zmusicjunkie Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Photographer
wow.
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LostInTheMorning Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The language has beautiful flow. I lulls you into misconceptions of good things until you reread the words and realize that some are anything but. Spectacular poem, dear.
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LostInTheMorning Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
*It lulls you
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dull-glitter Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Writer
Love this! Congrats on the DD! Very well deserved.
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madmankiller3859 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconclapplz: Very well written, well blended, And its a just beautiful poem. Very deserving of a DD.
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IAmKittyKat Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Artist
i love the idea, but i don't understand. is that intentional? the movie that played out in my head was so beautiful. these words, i think, are beautiful.
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Bahar1 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Can someone explain me what this is about? My English is not good enough to get it. Do me a favour?
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Rosesarecool356 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
very nice! I think that the way you blend words is very calming! :D And the way you make is serious but casual is very cool! Keep up th good work! :D (sorry for the why i worded this. It sounds kinda motherly. :P)
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MaskedRaccoon Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
Something of the best I've read in a while. I don't comment much, but I can't let this one be. Not with just a favourite, so... It's beautiful.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Writer
Congrats on the DD :D This is a lovely poem :D
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
Have a nice day! : )
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OddballOreo Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student General Artist
This sent shivers down my spine. Just... wow. Amazing work. Very much deserving of a DD. Congrats!
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pengirl100and2 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012   Writer
caught me from the beginning and took my breath away. lovely job, i love the breaking of the lines.
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Eevee1999 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Writer
Great job on the DD! Wonderful poem!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012   General Artist
Congratulations on the DD! Hooray! :squee:
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neonparrot Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Was it supposed to be sarcastic or I'm the only one who sees great wisdom and lulz and girls' behaviour here? This is beautiful, even though I can't feel the complete english language yet. And it's wise.
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Minatu-chan Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. That was awesome.
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Altaeyyr Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I feel... touched, by this. It's so... big. Words are failing me. But it rings true in all the right ways.
This is beautifully written. Wonderful.
Thank you.
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anniekirkland Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Artist
:iconfreeinternetplz:
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daydreamer745 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
Felt as if I was struck by something so beautifully profound..
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princen-scythe Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Ah, wow! That's just... wow!

Utterly engrossing and specatular! You're bringing out my vocabulary, you amazing writer! Well done! A very well deserved DD!
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SethFox Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
Wow :heart:
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VictorHugo Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
sexiest thing i´ve ever read!
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ThatSarcasticPixie Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
...Wow o_o
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely beautiful. A well deserved DD.
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calmlike-abomb Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
wow, that was a trip
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Student Writer
this is phenomenal
absolutely, utterly phenomenal
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back-bones Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012   General Artist
You just write in such a breathtakingly beautiful manner. Congratulations on the well deserved DLD! :huggle:
Thank you for sharing this piece with us, bless your soul:heart:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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back-bones Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
thank you so much! :heart:
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Writer
LovethissomuchIcan'tbreathebetweenthewordsofthepoem. :heart:

This truly read like silk. So much beauty in this. A well-deserved feature. :nod: Lovely.
What a trip that was! :faint:
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I would love to quote my favorite line, but there are too many of them. This is simply stunning.
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beautiful-creature Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think I love you for writing this. It was... utterly amazing. There are no words.
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towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012   Writer
this is gorgeous. you're gorgeous.
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featherback Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This was just... wow. Absolutely, astoundingly amazing. I want to write like you one day. <3
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